2/3/13

The Collision! Weekend Writing Warriors #WeWriWa

It's Weekend Writing Warriors (WeWriWa), a new Sunday post inspired by the wildly successful Six Sentence Sunday, which ended last week. Many thanks to the admins at Six Sentence Sunday for such a great idea and activity. And thanks to the admins at WeWriWa for picking up the baton and organizing another way for all of us to stay connected.

Weekend Writing Warriors share an 8-sentence excerpt, and today I'm sharing from my VERY RECENTLY PUBLISHED young adult paranormal romance, ONCE AND FOR ALL. This is book 2 in the Sky Cove Series. Both books in the series are available at Amazon, B&N, and other retailers. (A complete list of links appears on the right sidebar.)

The opening of the "book blurb" says... What happens when 180 pounds of football star collides with 105 pounds of art geek?  The following excerpt, from the prologue, show us that collision. It's December 30 in Sky Cove, Maine. It's cold and icy, and as Phoebe tries to walk in to the hardware store, Todd is barreling out. She falls on her tush, and looks up to see...


Todd Miller, with his designer jeans and expensive black coat.

"Uh, Sorry," he said, his eyes locked uncomfortably on mine, but not bothering to help me up.

Like I needed his help.

Making matters worse was the fact that he was so freaking cute. And yeah, I'd noticed that a long time ago. Unfortunately, every time he opened his mouth all the cuteness went away.

I pushed up, gaining my feet without slipping again on the ice. The stupid moron just stood there continuing to stare at me.


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16 comments:

  1. This is so good--you packed some great information in this snippet, and expressed a bit of adolescence so perfectly! I love that she doesn't melt away into insecurity when confronted by his perfection. :-)

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  2. I am not going to say anything about the snippet since I am no expert on nothing. I will only reflect on how this made me feel since I am the only one to know what I feel.

    I feel very attached to both the boy and the girl.

    I felt so good for the boy since he was given a chance to attract the girl, catch her attention. Through his cuteness maybe or whatever, she found something in him that she can relate to. And this formed a bond between the two, a start maybe, but a positive and a good one.

    For the girl, I felt a deep compassion. She must be a very lucky person, Lord's beloved I thought. Life had put right in front of her eyes what she did not like in one way and yet got attracted in another. This I felt reflected an inner conundrum in her, sort of a mistrust in herself or in her qualities and that she had to resolve that by searching deep into her heart. What was more important to her, what was it that she sought in others, what was a fundamental trait for her and what was a rather superficial, tangential element. The brief snippet made me feel that she was scared of challenging herself, putting herself, her feelings to test. She was so horrified accepting herself as is, she constantly sought approval of others. While her inner nature told her that the boy was freaking cute, her cultural aspirations and the personality dress she borrowed from others told her that the boy was a useless brat, and his manners was not fit for any judgment.

    So I did not know whose side I was leaning towards. My gut feeling says that I am her friend, and his brother somehow, so a bit of both...

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  3. I love that she mentally picks on him for not helping her, but at the same time shows her toughness in that she doesn't need his help. Love her. Gosh, I want to know what he's thinking.

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  4. She's a strong heroine all right! I've enjoyed past snippets from this book so I KNOW there's more to Todd than "just" the football hero. Great excerpt, good introduction to the characters.

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  5. He gets a demerit for not helping her up...unless he's so mesmerized by her that he forgets his manners. *BG* See, I'm already invested in them. Great snippet!

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  6. Not the most promising of meetings, but I like her 'mixed' reactions to him.

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  7. I liked this guy SO much better last week, LOL! Awesome to know he redeems himself so thoroughly!

    Sarah Ballance

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  8. Why doesn't he help her up? Maybe he's too busy staring at how cute SHE is to remember to help her! Interesting meeting which makes us wonder about them both.

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  9. Now why do I get the feeling there's some animosity between the two? LOL. Very good snippet with good and authentic voices.

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  10. You've got the wry teen voice down pat! I'm gonna give Todd the benefit of the doubt and assume he's just love struck. ;)

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  11. I don't even want to think about the number of times I had a thought very close to your last line while I was in high school. Great snippet, Amy.

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  12. Great snippet. I work with teenagers and you capture that voice really well.

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  13. Just like my kids at the high school.

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  14. I get the feeling that it's a situation where he can't win. :) back next week to find out what happens.

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