11/20/11

Six Sentence Sunday: The First

Once again, I'm posting from my work-in-progress, "Dusk", a YA paranormal story.  When we left Zoe and Adrian last week, she'd just told him the awful truth about her father's infidelity and subsequent death.   Unfortunately, that's not all the unsavory things Zoe has to tell.  Immediately prior to the snippet in today's scene, Zoe's summer of drinking and hard-partying has been revealed to Adrian by someone else, in the middle of the school cafeteria no less.  After school she gives him the details, including the DUI car crash that finally "woke her up" and caused her to change her ways.  She thinks Adrian will be finished with her after learning the truth.  She's wrong.

My chest expanded until I thought it might explode as Adrian shifted his head slightly and leaned closer.  The split second before his lips touched mine seemed like a million years, and in those million years all kinds of thoughts raced through my brain.

I'd just told him the story of my most horrible, stupid mistake, and his reaction is to kiss me?  Was it a pity kiss?  Was it some kind of show of sympathy?  Would I embarrass myself with lack of technique or excess slobber?



I hope you enjoyed this glimpse into Zoe and Adrian's first kiss!  Be sure to check out the official Six Sentence Sunday site and find lots of other talented authors.  Thanks in advance for your encouraging comments.  I look forward to visiting your blogs as well.  Happy Sunday everyone!


13 comments:

  1. Aww. I love her inner dialogue. So sweet that she's worried about too much slobber!

    ReplyDelete
  2. So adorable in its awkwardness. Great six!

    ReplyDelete
  3. Awe, love the sweetness of their first kiss.

    ReplyDelete
  4. The way you described the time and how so few seconds could feel so long was a great start. Well done.

    ReplyDelete
  5. Maybe it's a kiss of comfort and understanding. He's a dear! What will she do about it, I wonder?

    ReplyDelete
  6. Isn't that just like a woman to second guess? Great six!

    ReplyDelete
  7. I bet it all turns out fine. Adrian seems like a nice guy. Gosh, I'm so invested in the character, I'm defending him! Excellent excerpt!

    ReplyDelete
  8. Wonderful six! I think she's feeling a bit vulnerable? Been there, felt that. . .

    ReplyDelete
  9. Sweet moment, you captured the feeling of the scene so well. Sensational six, Amy.

    ReplyDelete
  10. Love all the conflict going on in her head, especially the last line, lol.

    ReplyDelete