10/15/11

Six Sentence Sunday: Zoe's First Look

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And now for today's post.  Last week, I started posting from my current work-in-progress, "Dusk".  Zoe Gray, the heroine, is battling back after the death of her father... and a whole lot of other drama that happened before he died.  Adrian Shaw moves to town, and the two become fast friends.  For the first time in months, Zoe sees a light at the end of the tunnel.  But... Adrian is more than meets the eye, although what meets the eye is pretty nice!  In the following passage, Zoe is getting her first look at Adrian from across the school parking lot.  And yeah... she likes what she sees.

Even from a distance I could tell he was tall, at least a head taller than the boy getting into the truck next to him.  His hair, dark and just long enough to turn up on the ends was just the right amount of messy.  I couldn't see the color of the eyes, but the deep dimples in his cheeks flashed when he smiled at me.  


He.  Smiled.  At me.


I included a couple of pictures that give an idea what I "see" when I picture these two.  That's Drew Roy, who played Seth Hancock in Secretariat, and Teresa Palmer, who played Becky in The Sorcerer's Apprentice and Number Six in I Am Number Four.  







20 comments:

  1. I love the reflection in the last line. Well done!

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  2. I'm totally with her. I love dimples. Especially when they are aimed in my direction.

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  3. Is that the guy who plays the guitarist and Hannah's love interest in Hannah Montana? Love the pics, and great six. Dimples are a definite plus. :-D

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  4. Nice Six Sentences. It's my first time finding my way over to you, but I have to say, I love the title. Best of luck with book!

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  5. Love your voice in this little teaser.

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  6. Oh, just the right amount of messy. (But I'll bet she wants to mess it up even more.) Great Six, Amy!

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  7. I love the rhythm of the longer and shorter sentences!

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  8. This captures the adolescent emphasis so well. Great six!

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  9. Oooh, dimples and dark messy hair! *swoons* Great description and can't wait to see what happens. :)

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  10. Oh, young love. I think you've captured a Zoe's teen-age crush completely!

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  11. How very sweet! I can't wait for more of this story. Sensational six!

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  12. Great voice for Zoe. And I don't blame her for liking what she sees! Great six!

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  13. Very nice description, and I like the voice, too :) The 'messy' comment, especially :)

    ...I had one concern though, how far away are they from each other? I'm thinking, maybe 10 feet max if she can see the dimples on his cheeks...

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  14. I love the last line and how I can literally hear her voice saying it.

    Cool six sentences.

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