9/18/11

Six Sentence Sunday: Sometimes I Look at You

It's Sunday again... time for another Six Sentence Sunday post!  Thanks to all of you who've visited my past SSS posts.  I'm always encouraged by your kind words.  And I always enjoy visiting your blogs and reading snippets of your work, as well.

Today's Six picks up where last week's left off.  The chunk of dialogue surrounding Luke's "in that way" speech is some of my favorite.  I couldn't fit it all in last week's Six, so I decided to do a "continuation" this week.  The set up is the same as last week.  Luke and Layla are in the thick of the battle with the evil forces that destroyed them in their past lives, and it's put a real damper on their budding teenage romance.  Luke's a tad bit ticked that they've not been able to have normal relationship. His frustration comes out in a run-on sentence and a heart-melting confession!

My heart went wild in my chest, and I wondered if he could hear it.  The look on his face melted everything inside me, turning my brain to a mud puddle.


But he wasn't finished.


"Sometimes I look at you and I forget all about strange dreams and visions and past lives, and all I can think about is how pretty you look and how lucky I am and how proud I am that you want to be with me. Sometimes all I want is to just be a normal eighteen year-old guy who's crazy about his girlfriend."


Ohmigosh, wow.

            

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24 comments:

  1. Ohmigosh, wow. *Sigh.* I'd have taken the evil forces in high school in exchange for a guy like that. Nice six!

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  2. The emotion leaps off the page. Great six.

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  3. Yeah I had the same reaction ohmigosh wow! Nice six.

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  4. ohmigosh wow sums it up pretty accurately!

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  5. Stupid evil forces getting in the way. Great six!

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  6. Aw...his rambling is so sweet and heartfelt.

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  7. Aww. Love how it all comes out in a rush of emotion.

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  8. Young love. And yet some complications there....

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  9. Young love and evil forces. Love the combination

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  10. Well done! Great Six, Amy! Good use of the runon sentence, too!

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  11. Aw, this made me just want to hug him and never let go! Awesome six!

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  12. Very sweet :)

    ...but 'mud puddle' made me think she was about 11...

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  13. LOL! Every time I read "mud puddle" I wonder if it makes her sound too young. I wanted to say something that would make her sound younger than a grown-up, but still convey the same idea. But so far, I haven't come up with anything else that suits me, so I've left "mud puddle" in there. When/if the right thing strikes me, I can go back in and revise it!

    Thanks for stopping by everybody! I appreciate it bunches!!

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  14. I need to know more about these "evil forces"!
    Really good Six, Amy!
    ~Ryan Derham

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  15. Aww. It sounds like the hero is a sweetie.

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