9/25/11

Six Sentence Sunday: Not Giving In

It's that time again!  Big thanks to those of you who've been so kind to stop by my previous Six Sentence Sunday posts and leave comments.  It's my pleasure to return the favor and visit your blogs as well!

This week's post is excerpted from the last part of my complete YA novel "You Again".  At this point in the story, Layla is taken captive by the reincarnated version of the evil-doer who destroyed the life she and Lucas had built together in their past life.  He's not giving up, and she's not giving in, and the reader is left to wonder if all is lost.  


Pain sliced through my skull as he grabbed me by the hair, wrenching my head against his chest until his arm came around me in a headlock.  I struggled, flailing wildly against him while he pulled me further into the surf.  The freezing water now up to my chest, my clothes pulled against me like quicksand.

Something caught my eye.  A blur, as if something was moving far up the beach toward the parking area.  If someone was there, all I needed was a distraction, a split second to get out of his hold and run screaming toward the movement.


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18 comments:

  1. Fantastically written, you got so much urgent need in so few sentences. Well done.

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  2. Intense! Her fear leaps from the page!

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  3. Very intense. I'm intrigued as to who--or what--has a hold of her. Cool 6. :o)

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  4. Love the tension you have going on here. Very nice 6. :o)

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  5. Sounds like a strong heroine. She's thinking not panicking. Great six!

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  6. Oh my! I love the intensity in this snippet. Well done!

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  7. Great six, actions and feelings captured perfectly. Well done!

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  8. This is fabulous! I love the intensity, and you captured the sensation of the water so well. Excellent job! (I have a "water scene" in my Oct 17 release, so I can really appreciate your work here, lol.)

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  9. Oohhh! Somebody help her! I don't know if you could tell, but I get tense during these scenes. Great six!

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  10. Wow, excellent tension. Very vivid scene. Love your descriptions, especially her dress like quicksand. Great six!

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  11. intriguing & suspenseful. love it. The scene is vividly written. well done

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  12. Wow, scary situation, great cliffhanger, just when it seems hopeless, a gleam of a chance! Suspenseful six!

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  13. I really enjoyed your descriptions: the feel of her clothes against her skin and the freezing water. I can almost feel the pounding surf. Good job.
    Thanks too for your comment on my blog post.

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  14. Very nice tension, but I keep getting caught up on 'skull' in the first line since a skull is bone, therefore pulling hair wouldn't make bone hurt,but I get what you mean... it's the skin over the skull that hurts...

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  15. Oi. You just made me very glad I'm standing on solid ground and not in the water. Wow - great job with tension and panic!

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