8/28/11

Six Sentence Sunday: Realization


This week's "Six Sentence Sunday" again comes from my completed YA manuscript "You Again". In last week's post, we saw the main characters, Lucas and Layla, meet for the first time in this life. This week, we see them at the coast, after a particularly realistic and unsettling dream of their past life together. Neither realizes that the other is experiencing the dreams, but all that changes when they both show up at the beach early one Saturday morning!



My breathing was rapid by the time I reached the outcropping, my legs burning from the force of my sprint down the beach. The sky was overcast and the cool morning air burned as I pulled it into my lungs.

Salty, damp ocean air stirred around my face as I bent over, bracing my hands on my knees, trying to calm my heart rate, all the while glancing back and forth, proving to myself that all was fine and no one had been hurt here as I slept.

I heard the hammering of feet just before I heard his voice.

"Layla!"

Luke sped around the rocks, skidding to a halt when he saw me.


Happy reading and writing!


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15 comments:

  1. Very nice descriptive six with loads of intrigue. Well done!

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  2. Great six Amy. Love the way you work in the description, in first person POV no less, and make it sound natural.

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  3. Great snippet. Love the tension and descriptions!

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  4. Ooooh, it feels so intense and action-y (made up my own adjective there). Great six!

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  5. I felt as if I were on the outcropping! Great descriptive Six!

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  6. Suspenseful. Good description of her trepidation.

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  7. Ooo. I love a good reincarnation story. Very cool.

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  8. I love how personal this feels.

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  9. The description is very visceral, love it!

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  10. Not sure if that last comment posted so trying again: Really felt winded along with her; terrific description in these six.

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  11. Interesting... nice description of the physical symptoms.

    You used both 'burning' and 'burned', so you might want to change one to a different word...

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  12. Great building of tension and weaving in of description--makes me want more!

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